I heard waves coming over me when I was swimming at Raglan beach.
I saw people eating fish and chips and delicious ice creams.
I felt like going and spending my savings at the dairy on ice creams because it was as hot as the sun.
I wondered if my mum might take me back to he beach to go and play because that is my favourite place to have fun.
To Gemma,
ReplyDeleteI like how you changed the word yummy to delicious to make it more interesting. Remember to use lots of adjectives in your writing this year Gemma so that it is interesting for the reader. I also like the detail you added for how you felt and what you wondered.
From Mrs Head